This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story#
Polca#
Bowie goes to the mayor.
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April Script
They're not aware, but
Volcanon has been
irritated... |
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Final Script
You're not aware, but
Volcanon has become
irriated... |
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The town rumbles!
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April Script
...like that! And, it's
getting worse.
What's wrong? |
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Final Script
...like that! And, it's getting
worse.
What's wrong you ask? |
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What's wrong is that the entire town quakes violently, white light filling the area.
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April Script
Whoa! Volcanon exploded!
It must be an evil
omen.... |
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Final Script
Whoa! Mt. Volcano erupted!
It's an evil omen. |
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''As Bowie and co. head to the base of Mt. Volcano, a blue-haired boy walks in and quickly collapses. The beastman by the volcano's entrance calls for the mayor.
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April Script
Mayor, a boy
from the hill is
seriously injured! |
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Final Script
Mayor, a boy from the mountain
is seriously injured! |
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The mayor quickly inspects the boy.
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April Script
Wooo...his eyes are
seriously damaged! |
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Final Script
Ohhh...his eyes are
seriously damaged! |
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The mayor takes the boy to his house for rehabilitation. Bowie takes the force to the base of Mt. Volcano to advance the plot.
Base of Mt. Volcano#
Peter spies a group of monsters at the top of the volcano's base. They're looking for something...
The monsters are looking at marks on the ground. They wonder if it's evidence of a battle against the birdmen of Bedoe.
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April Script
Could be...but....
See those volcano rocks. |
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Final Script
Could be...
see those volcanic rocks? |
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They know that they're from Volcanon, but he's never attacked the birdmen before. The Evil Cloud (Read: Palette-swapped Gizmo) in the group quickly spots Bowie's gang.
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April Script
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Final Script
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The Evil Cloud (Read: Presumptuous Gizmo) thinks they're Polca people.
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April Script
Polca people are cowards
living the peaceful life. |
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Final Script
Polcan people are cowards that
live in peace. |
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The Death Archer declares that they'll never return alive! And he's right, because all the monsters are summarily slaughtered.
The blue-faced archer wonders how they're able to defeat devils.
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April Script
Ah! You have the evil jewel
around your neck....
It's you, [Hero]...
I been waiting for you.... |
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June Script
Ah! You have the Jewel of
Evil around your neck.
It's you, [Hero].
I've been waiting for you. |
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Final Script
Ah! You have the Jewel of
Evil around your neck.
It's you, [Hero].
We've been waiting for you. |
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The death archer dies dead by detonating.
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April Script
[Hero], did you hear
that? He said, he was
waiting for you.
Why are devils chasing you? |
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Final Script
[Hero], did you hear
that? He said, he had
been waiting for you.
Why do the devils want you? |
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Bedoe#
At the entrance to Bedoe, two birdmen keep guard. They're keen to Bowie's distinctly non-avian appearance.
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April Script
Bedoe is a kingdom of
birdmen! |
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Final Script
Bedoe is only for birdmen! |
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April Script
Why are you so high-
handed? |
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Final Script
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The birdmen salute Sir Peter. Yes, Peter was knighted. The big yellow bird grasps on something strange.
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April Script
It's too quiet and too
alert than usual. |
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Final Script
I just realized...
Why are you flying guard? |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Yep. Devils invaded Bedoe.
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April Script
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Final Script
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It happens. The devils broke through Volcanon's barrier, but he drove them back because, well, he's Volcanon.
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April Script
Bowie, they were
also of the devil army! |
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Final Script
The devils we fought must
have been part of that army! |
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April Script
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Final Script
You met some other devils? |
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The excitable birdmen fly off to the battlefield. Peter stops them, saying that they're already dead.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
We'll go and make sure... |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
We're going to Polca
to patrol. |
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Final Script
We're going to Polca village
to patrol. |
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Peter takes Bowie to see King Bedoe.
In the throne room, a guard captain is addressing her troops, Luke -- a named character so he must be important -- and King Bedoe.
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April Script
And...what about the
greater devil? |
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Final Script
What about the greater
devil? |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
Can't you track him?
We should kill him
before he regains his
strength. |
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Final Script
Can't you track him?
We must capture him before
he regains his strength. |
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The guard captain thinks he came from Grans Island. She tells her forces to watch for another attack.
This is where Peter and Bowie walk in. Claude greets Peter, and King Bedoe asks Peter how his trip was.
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April Script
Let me introduce my
friends. |
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Final Script
Let me introduce my friend. |
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April Script
This is Bowie.
He's from Grans and-- |
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Final Script
This is Bowie.
He's from Grans and... |
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April Script
I know. He is a pupil
of Astral at Granseal. |
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Final Script
I know. He is a pupil of
Astral of Granseal. |
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Peter asks how he knows of Astral. Turns out the party took so long to get there that Luke had time to visit New Granseal.
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April Script
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Final Script
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King Bedoe brings up the fact that the people of Granseal unleashed Zeon, who could very well destroy the world.
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April Script
Sorry to interrupt you
but...is he that strong? |
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Final Script
Sorry to interrupt, but is
he that strong? |
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April Script
Zeon is king of kings in
devil legends. |
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Final Script
Zeon is King of the Devils. |
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Translation Notes
There's a pretty consistent change of Zeon's title in later scripts. In the April script there are multiple devil kings, with Zeon ruling over all, while in the later scripts he's the sole king. |
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April Script
Peter, you had
better go and see God
Volcanon. |
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Final Script
Peter, you had better
go see Volcanon. |
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Peter's return might calm him down.
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April Script
Oh, is he displeased?
Maybe later-- |
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Final Script
Oh, is he angry?
Maybe later... |
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Well, too bad, Volcanon's been waiting for Peter. King Bedoe asks Peter if he's taking Bowie along with him.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
He thinks Granseal people
are-- |
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Final Script
He thinks the people of
Granseal are... |
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April Script
King Bedoe, I think
[Hero] has to see
the God.
He should talk to Volcanon. |
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Final Script
King Bedoe, I think
[Hero] has to see
Volcanon.
He should talk to him. |
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King Bedoe acquiesces, and dismisses Peter.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Volcanon's Shrine#
Peter approaches Volcanon, a massive phoenix with red eyes.
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April Script
Welcome back, [Peter].
Oh, you look well. |
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Final Script
Welcome back, [Peter].
You look well. |
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Peter had an interesting trip, so he says.
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April Script
What was so interesting
for you? |
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Final Script
What made it interesting? |
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April Script
I've talked to a lot of
people on the ground. |
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Final Script
I met a lot people that live
on the ground. |
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Translation Notes
Should be a lot of people. This was correct in the April draft. |
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April Script
They live helping one
another. I learned their
friendship. |
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Final Script
They help each other.
I made some friends. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Peter presents Bowie from Granseal. Volcanon's fury shakes the temple.
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April Script
People of Grans Island
caused a serious, fatal
problem for the world! |
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Final Script
People of Grans Island
caused a serious, deadly
problem for the world! |
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The temple shakes again.
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April Script
They waked Zeon!
The legendary devil! |
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Final Script
They awakened Zeon, the
legendary devil! |
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April Script
I've been protecting all
the lives on the ground. |
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Final Script
I've been protecting all the
ground-dwelling people. |
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April Script
But, I can't forgive you
this time! |
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Final Script
I can't forgive them for
this! |
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More temple rumblings. Volcanon really likes doing this.
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April Script
Volcanon, please calm
down! Please! |
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Final Script
Volcanon, please calm down! |
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April Script
[Hero]'s not the
man who did it! |
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Final Script
[Hero]'s not the person
who did it! |
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April Script
Everybody on the ground
has to take responsibility
for what happened. |
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Final Script
Everybody who lives on the
ground is responsible. |
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April Script
They have to expiate this
by themselves. |
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Final Script
They have to solve this by
themselves. |
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Translation Notes
Expiation is the act of appeasing a deity. It's an appropriate word, but it's probably beyond the reading level of the rest of the game's script. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I'll never help nor protect
them regarding this incident. |
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Final Script
My protection ceases now! |
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April Script
They must face the devils.
They must expiate it. |
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Final Script
He must face the devils on
his own. |
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Volcanon does his favorite party trick.
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April Script
If all the humans are
annihilated, that's OK.
That's their destiny. |
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Final Script
If all the humans are
annihilated, that's OK.
It's their destiny. |
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An earthquake swallows the ground and-- oh, it's Volcanon again.
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April Script
I want them show me their
courage. |
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Final Script
I want them to show me
courage. |
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April Script
They must seal away the
devil once again. |
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Final Script
They must reseal the devil
again. |
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Volcanon instructs Bowie to believe in the light of the jewel.
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April Script
It belongs to the light,
and to the darkness at
the same time. |
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Final Script
It belongs to both the
light and the darkness. |
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April Script
It shows its true power
when the light and the
darkness are integrated. |
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Final Script
It shows its true power
when the light and the
darkness are as one. |
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April Script
You may go now. I don't
want to see anybody till you
defeat Zeon. |
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Final Script
You may go now. I don't
want to see anybody until
Zeon is defeated. |
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Peter tries to talk to Volcanon again, but there's no response. Peter and Bowie decide to take on Zeon by themselves.
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April Script
I didn't know he's such a
cold hearted god. |
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Final Script
I didn't know he was such a
cold-hearted god. |
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April Script
OK, I'll help them! I'm go
with them to seal away the
devil! |
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Final Script
OK, I'll help you! I'll
go with you to reseal the
devil! |
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Translation Notes
Peter's talking to Volcanon in the April script, and Bowie in the final script. |
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And, finally, Peter properly joins the party.
Area Dialogue#
Polca#
The town's greeter is impressed that people made it through the Cave of Darkness.
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April Script
Oh, you defeated that
Hobgoblin? Wow!
Now we can use that
tunnel between the
wilderness and Polca! |
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June Script
Oh, you defeated that
hobgoblin? Wow!
Now we use that tunnel to
travel between Polca and
the wilderness area! |
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Final Script
Oh, you defeated that
hobgoblin? Wow!
Now we can use that tunnel
to travel between Polca and
the wilderness area! |
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Translation Notes
This centaur has a problem with tenses. |
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This beastman envies the youth.
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April Script
Young men these days
are depraved! I wish
I were young again! |
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Final Script
Young men these days are
lucky! I wish I was young
again! |
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Translation Notes
Erm...no comment. |
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This beastman acts like a sign!
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April Script
There is the sacred area
of Volcanon. |
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Final Script
To the east is the sacred
area of Volcanon. |
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And this beastman's porridge is just right.
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April Script
Mt. Volcano is home for
Beastman.
We're a warlike tribe,
but we've almost forgot how
to fight in the peace. |
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Final Script
Mt. Volcano is home to
beastmen.
We were a warlike tribe, but
we've almost forgot how
to fight. |
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The only dwarf in this town makes the town's weapons.
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April Script
But, who uses them in this
peaceful world? |
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Final Script
But, who uses them in this
peaceful country? |
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On the left side of town, a poor turtle-thing has been flipped over.
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April Script
Help! Help!
I can't...I can't!
You, please turn me over! |
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Final Script
Help! Help!
I can't...get up!
You, please turn me over! |
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Bowie helps flip him over by repeatedly tackling the creature. Then the turtle turns into a fairy.
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April Script
(Giggle)...Sorry, I had
to test you.
I'm happy to know your
kind!
He must like you.
Oh, no, I can't tell you
who he is.
See you later! |
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Final Script
(Giggle)...Sorry, I had to
test you.
I'm happy to meet you.
He must like you.
Oh no, I can't tell you who
HE is.
See you later! |
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Afterwards, the turtle is back in the same spot. Or is the fairy in disguise again? Was there ever a turtle in this town? Anyways, he's talking about something or other.
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April Script
In the ancient time, there
were magic tunnels. |
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June Script
In the ancient times, there
were magic tunnels. |
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Final Script
In ancient times, there
were magic tunnels. |
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After the eruption, the mayor worries about the purple-haired lad.
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April Script
Oh, very serious!
I hope he survives tonight... |
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Final Script
Oh, this is serious!
I hope he survives the night. |
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The purple-haired boy is in a bad spot.
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April Script
Ah...stop...no!
I don't want to see...
...Ah...head...aches... |
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Final Script
Ah...stop...no!
I don't want...to see....
My...head...aches.... |
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And then, the books.
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April Script
A book...
LEGENDARY VOLCANON |
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
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Bedoe#
The invading devils? This birdman doesn't think they were that bad.
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April Script
Yes, they're strong.
But....
Monsters like the Kraken
and Taros are much
stronger! |
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Final Script
Yes, they were strong.
But...
Monsters like the Kraken and
Taros are much bigger! |
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This birdman by the bar soda fountain needs a nip of courage.
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April Script
(hiccup)...I'm not afraid
of devils...
as long as I have a drink
first...(hiccup). |
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Final Script
(Burp)...I'm not afraid
of devils...
as long as I drink a
rootbeer first...(burp). |
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coffee]]. |
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This particular birdwoman seems overprotective, but consider that invading devils are a common occurrence in this world.
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April Script
I never let my child
go out! |
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Final Script
I never let my hatchling
go out! |
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The aforementioned caged bird sings of the wonders outside.
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April Script
How wonderful it would
to fly in such a
beautiful sky! |
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Final Script
How wonderful it would be to
fly on such a beautiful day! |
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Now this is just tragic.
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April Script
Have you seen my dad?
Mom doesn't tell me
anything about him. |
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Final Script
Have you seen my dad?
Mom won't tell me anyhting
about him. |
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Translation Notes
The "anyhting" typo was introduced in the June script and was never spotted or corrected. |
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A birdman mocks Bowie's land-dwelling nature.
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April Script
Shhhh! Be quiet
before King Bedoe. |
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Final Script
Kneel before King Bedoe.
Just kidding. |
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Books and book-like materials.
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April Script
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Final Script
It reads...
Don't drink and fly! |
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Translation Notes
The text pointer is obviously incorrect in the April prototype; This is a note next to the bar. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
A book...
CHICKEN BREEDING |
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
Yikes. Pretty obvious why this got changed. |
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April Script
A book...
MALE AND FEMALE |
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Final Script
A book...
FIGHT WHILE FLYING |
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Translation Notes
This change, though, seems overcautious. |
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April Script
A book...
BIRDMAN NOWADAYS |
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Final Script
A magazine...
BIRDMEN TODAY |
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Translation Notes
Who's printing these magazines? |
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Volcanon's Shrine#
Outside the shrine, a birdman outlines territorial boundaries.
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April Script
Devils?
They can't go any further
than here. |
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Final Script
Devils?
They can't enter the shrine. |
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The keeper of the phoenix legend speaks!
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April Script
Do you know the legend
of the Phoenix? |
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Final Script
Do you know the legend
of the phoenix? |
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If "Yes" is selected:
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April Script
And [Peter] was born
from the holy fire.
Volcanon is the highest
god and can revive
anything.
Phoenix serves him and
works for him to help
people. |
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Final Script
And [Peter] was born from
holy fire.
Volcanon is the highest
of gods and can revive
anything.
Phoenix serve and work for
him.
They help the people. |
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If "No" is selected:
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April Script
A phoenix is the legendary
bird who can't be killed.
But, it still has a life.
When his span of life is
nearly over, he bursts into
a holy fire to finish it...
And the fire creates
another life for phoenix
on the ground. |
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June Script
A phoenix is the legendary
bird who can't be killed.
It it life itself.
When his first life is
nearly over, he bursts into
holy fire to finish it.
The fire creates another
life for phoenix on the
ground. |
|
Final Script
A phoenix is the legendary
bird who can't be killed.
It it life itself.
When his first life is
nearly over, he bursts into
holy fire to finish it.
The fire creates another
life for the phoenix on the
ground. |
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(Source: Original TCRF research)
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