This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story#
Creed's Basement#
Deep below Creed's mansion, and thankfully above the lava below said mansion, Creed chants in front of a large altar-like structure.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
Hey, the evil spirit is
appearing! |
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Final Script
Hey, Evil Spirit is
appearing! |
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Translation Notes
In the final script, "Evil Spirit" is the name of the entity that Creed talks to. In the April script, though, "evil spirit" is just a descriptor for the creature, not a name. |
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A giant, golden-eyed blue head with bushy eyebrows appears above the altar.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Evil Spirit asks what Creed wants, exactly. It's Zeon.
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April Script
Zeon? The king of the
three devil kings? |
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Final Script
Zeon? The King of the
Devils? |
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Translation Notes
The first mention of the three devil kings was removed from later scripts. |
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April Script
Exactly.
He was unsealed. |
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Final Script
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April Script
Let me know anything
about him. Anything. |
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Final Script
I need to know anything
about him. Anything! |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Evil Spirit concentrates hard, channeling his mind into the nature of all things.
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April Script
The barrier around Grans
Island is too strong.I can't see
anything. |
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Final Script
The barrier around Grans
Island is too strong.
I can't see anything. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
If I touch his belongings,
maybe I can contact
his mind better.... |
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Final Script
If I touch something of his,
maybe I could contact his
mind better.... |
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Peter mentions that Bowie has the Jewel of Evil.
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April Script
Is that true, [Hero]?
That's one of the magic
stones used to seal
Zeon. Give it to me. |
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June Script
Is this true, [Hero]?
That's one of the magic
stones used to seal
Zeon. Give it to me. |
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Final Script
Is this true, [Hero]?
That's one of the magic
jewels used to seal
Zeon. Give it to me. |
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Creed, believing he can remove the jewel, approaches Bowie, only to be greeted by a blinding light from the second jewel.
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April Script
The other one is...
they called it, the Jewel
of Light. |
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Final Script
The other one is...
...ahh...they called it,
the Jewel of Light. |
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April Script
[Hero], do you have
both of the legendaryjewels?
We can't remove them.
The chain is made of Mithril.
Show them to him.
They will help him. |
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June Script
[Hero], do you have both
of the legendary jewels?
We can't remove them.
The chain is made of Mithril.
Show them to him.
They might help him. |
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Final Script
[Hero], do you have both
of the legendary jewels?
I can't remove them.
The chain is made of Mithril.
Show them to him.
They might help him. |
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April Script
[Hero] displays thejewels to the
Evil Spirit. |
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Final Script
[Hero] displays the
jewels to Evil Spirit. |
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Evil Spirit tries again, bathing the entire area in sepia tones. He imparts to Creed that Arc Valley was reopened, Zeon was revived, and Zeon's devils are coming from the sky.
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April Script
They're very quick!
Where are they going to? |
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Final Script
Hmmm....
Where are they heading? |
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North Parmecia, the spirit says.
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April Script
Something happened to
Mitula... |
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Final Script
Something has happened to
Mitula.... |
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Evil Spirit can't actually see Zeon, as he's still in Arc Valley, gathering strength.
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April Script
But, he has already
done a lot of mischief
on the ground...
What were they? |
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Final Script
But, he has already created
a lot of mischief on the
ground...
Is he that powerful? |
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April Script
He is not perfect yet.
His power.... |
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Final Script
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Evil Spirit's speech slows down as his image flickers out and is replaced with a demonic head. More demonic.
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April Script
I'm Zeon! I'm the true
king of the devils! |
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Final Script
I'm Zeon! I'm the King of
the Devils! |
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April Script
Who is contacting me...
do you want to die?
Ggggooo....I see a jewel,
the Jewel of Evil! |
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Final Script
Who's contacting me?
Do you want to die?
Ggggooo...I see a jewel.
The Jewel of Evil! |
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April Script
He's seeing this side
through the Evil Spirit! |
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Final Script
He's seeing us through the
eyes of Evil Spirit! |
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Zeon tells Bowie to bring the Jewel of Evil to Arc Valley.
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April Script
Why do we have to obey
you?! |
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Final Script
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Zeon promises to exchanges Princess Elis for the Jewel of Evil. And, after giving out his order...
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April Script
The Evil Spirit exploded!
That's Zeon's power,
but he's not perfect yet.
If he revives fully, his
power will be awfully
strong! |
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Final Script
No! Evil Spirit exploded!
That's Zeons power.
If he revives fully, his
power will be unimaginably
strong! |
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April Script
Creed, how reliable was
he, I mean, the Evil
Spirit? |
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Final Script
Creed, how reliable was he,
I mean, Evil Spirit? |
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April Script
His information is reliable.
Why does he want the jewel?
I have no means to know
that now, without Spirit.... |
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Final Script
Very.
Why does Zeon want the jewel?
No more questions...
...without Evil Spirit.... |
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A dejected Creed exits the area, the force following quickly behind.
Creed's Mansion#
Bowie talks to Creed again before leaving.
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April Script
Maybe The Evil Jewel has
a secret.
Storytellers in Tristan
might know something.
Tristan is in North Parmecia. |
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Final Script
Maybe the Jewel of Evil has
a secret.
Storytellers in Tristan might
know something.
Tristan is in North Parmecia. |
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Okay, now he can leave...oh, right, the Fairy.
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April Script
Oh, is the Dwarf sick?
Really?
OK, I think I can help
him. Show me to his place. |
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Final Script
Oh, is a dwarf sick?
Really?
OK, I think I can help him.
Bring me to him. |
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The fairy tags along with the force. Now it's really time to leave...oh wait, the servant is here with the four important people from the Desktop Kingdom / Floor World. Only one of them can join the force. The choices are Eric, Randolf...
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April Script
Hee, hee...I'm not only
only a dizzy dwarf,
I'm [Randolf], know as
the strongest warrior in
the force. |
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Hee, hee...I'm not only a
dwarf, I'm [Randolf].
I'm known as the strongest
warrior of my people. |
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...Tyrin...
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I'm [Tyrin], a mage.
I had been studying magic
at Ponpei.
I miss my friends, but
if I can be of help, I
want to go with you! |
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Final Script
I'm [Tyrin], a mage.
I studied magic in Ponpei.
I'll miss my friends, but if
I can be of help, I'll go
with you! |
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...and Karna.
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April Script
I'm [Karna], a priest.
I think I'm rather young
for my race....
Well, I don't want to stay
in this awful place.
Choose me! |
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Final Script
I'm [Karna], a priest.
I think I'm rather young
for my profession....
I don't want to stay in this
awful place forever.
Choose me! |
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If the force chooses to pass on Karna...
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April Script
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Final Script
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...but why would they do that? It's Karna. The choice is always Karna. NOW it's time to leave...without Oddler, who decides to stay with Creed, though even he isn't sure why.
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April Script
I was very happy to be
with you [Hero]. |
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Final Script
It was great travelling with
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April Script
[Hero], you'll learn
the truth of this farewell
soon.
You don't have to think
about it now.
Go to the north. |
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Final Script
[Hero], you'll learn
the reason why he has to stay
here soon enough.
Don't think about it now.
Go to the north. |
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Dwarven Mine#
Before heading back to New Granseal, Bowie and the fairy visit the dwarven mine to see the sick dwarf.
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Oh, hello there.
Glad to see you. |
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Oh, thank goodness.
I sure am glad to see you. |
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April Script
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The fairy casts a healing spell on the dwarf.
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April Script
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The sick dwarf rises!
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I'm OK. I'm fine.
Yes, I'm well! |
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Final Script
I'm OK. I'm fine.
I feel great! |
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The dwarves ask the fairy how they can repay her.
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April Script
Never mind, but...
why don't you help
[Hero]? |
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Final Script
I don't need anything.
But, why don't you help
[Hero]? |
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April Script
[Hero], I'm going now.
I hope your journey is safe
and eventful. Bye! |
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[Hero], I'm going now.
I hope your journey is safe
and unevenful. Bye! |
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Translation Notes
The fairy's wishes did a 180 in the final script. The double space after "I'm" was never corrected in any revision. |
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April Script
Thanks to you, he's
recovered. |
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Thanks to you, he recovered. |
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As thanks, the dwarves give Bowie a large Cannon. Nice!
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We use it to destroy
large and solid rocks. |
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We use to to destroy large
rocks. |
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April Script
OK, guys!
Let's go back to Grans
Island! |
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OK, guys!
Let's go back to Grans
Island! |
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April Script
Let's start digging a tunnel! |
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And dig they did.
New Granseal#
Finally coming back to town, Bowie and the rest of the force receive a hero's welcome. Well, one guard welcomes them, anyway.
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Welcome back, [Hero]!
I heard your journey
was very hard. |
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Welcome back, [Hero]!
I heard your journey was
hard. |
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The soldiers asks the force to come to the castle.
New Granseal Castle#
Astral (remember him?) welcomes Bowie back.
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Thanks to you, Granseal
has many allies to trade
with now. |
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Thanks to you, Granseal has
many allies to trade with. |
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''Bedoe has informed Astral and the king of the goings-on.'
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April Script
I never imagined Zeon
being revived! |
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I never imagined Zeon could
be revived! |
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'The minister asks what this means for Princess Elis. Peter informs them that she's alive.''
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April Script
What did you say?!
Is she alive! |
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What did you say?!
Is she alive? |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
Did we hear you right,
[Hero?] |
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Translation Notes
Very confused line from Peter in the April script, since he just said that Princess Elis was alive. |
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Bowie nods. He and Peter explain in detail what they've come to know.
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April Script
About the ancient
civilians and Creed....
And Zeon's message
through the spirit statue.
They explained everything. |
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June Script
About the ancient ruins
and Creed....
And Zeon's message through
the spirit statue.
They explain everything. |
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Final Script
About the ancient ruins
and Creed....
And Zeon's message through
Evil Spilit.
They explain everything. |
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Translation Notes
The infamous "Evil Spilit" gaffe isn't in the April or May scripts. It was added in the final draft! |
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April Script
You've experience a great
journey.... |
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Final Script
you've experienced a great
deal. |
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April Script
What should Granseal do
now? |
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April Script
Of course, we have to
defeat Zeon and save Elis! |
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Easy, we have to defeat
Zeon and save Elis! |
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The minister doesn't think this is possible, but Astral agrees with the king.
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April Script
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April Script
Then what do we have
to do first? |
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What do we have to do first? |
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April Script
We've better go and see
the storytellers at
Tristan. |
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June Script
We'd better go and see the
the storytellers in Tristan. |
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Final Script
We'd better go and see the
storytellers in Tristan. |
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Translation Notes
The extra "the" in the May script is left over from the April draft. |
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The minister is confused by the "we" part of this conversation.
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April Script
It's quite an important
job. Will you allow me
to go with [Hero]? |
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It's an important job. Will
you allow me to go with
[Hero]? |
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April Script
Sure, sure! Just bring
Elis back here! |
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Final Script
Sure, sure! Just bring
Elis back to me! |
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April Script
Yes, yes.
Come back safely. |
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Final Script
Be careful, Astral.
It's dangerous out there. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Astral joins the force! As an adviser, not a fighter, but still, he's here for the long haul now.
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April Script
We have to remove the
rock blocking the passage
leading to North Parmecia. |
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Final Script
We have to remove the rocks
blocking the passageway
leading to North Parmecia. |
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New Granseal#
After visiting the local dwarf to get some dynamite for the cannon, and just before exiting the town, Bowie & company are stopped by an off-screen voice.
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April Script
I finally found you.
You're [Hero],
are you not? |
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Final Script
I finally found you.
You're [Hero], right? |
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An elf, cloaked similarly to Elric but with a pink twist, approaches the group.
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April Script
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April Script
My love, I mean
[Elric] is with you.
Is it true? |
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Final Script
My love, I mean
[Elric] is with you.
Am I right? |
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April Script
But nobody forced him.
[Elric] decided it. |
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Yes, he joined us willingly. |
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The elf explains that she doesn't want to take him away, she wants to join him in combat.
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April Script
It's not for sight-
seeing. Do you know
what I mean? |
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This is not a sightseeing
trip, if you know what I
mean? |
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She still wants to go.
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April Script
OK, you look tough
enough. |
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Final Script
OK, you look tough enough,
anyway. |
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Janet joins the force!
North Cliff#
There's another battle here. It's not important.
Setting up the cannon in front of the North Cliff cave entrance, Astral asks Rohde to assist.
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April Script
I think you know these
kind of things well.
[Hero] has a cannon and
explosive here. Can you
remove that rock? |
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Final Script
You know about devices like
this, right?
[Hero] has a cannon and
some dynamite here. Can you
remove those rocks? |
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Rohde, who's successfully operated an ancient vehicle that's able to shrink people, says he'll try to get the cannon working.
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April Script
[Rohde] gets the explosive
from [Hero]. |
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Final Script
[Rohde] gets the dynamite
from [Hero]. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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With a mighty blast, the cluster of rocks clogging the entrance is completely cleared out.
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April Script
This is great! This cannon
is great! |
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Final Script
Wow! This cannon is great! |
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April Script
I can attend the battle
with this weapon. |
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Final Script
I can attend the battles
with this weapon. |
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After asking if the cannon is needed for anything else, Rohde gets giddy.
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April Script
Wow, now I can fight with
you! |
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Final Script
Wow, now I can fight along
side you! |
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Yes, even Rohde joins the force! Will wonders never cease!
Area Dialogue#
Creed's Mansion#
Another update, another library check.
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April Script
A book...
IMMORTAL VAMPIRES |
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Final Script
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After Oddler decides to stay with Creed, the servant wonders how he's doing.
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April Script
Is he getting back his
memory?
He is suffering from a
very bad headache. |
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Final Script
Is he getting back his
memory yet?
He's suffering from a very
bad headache. |
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New Granseal#
The young boy from the entrance knows what's up.
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April Script
Welcome back, [Hero].
I know, you're going
out soon. |
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Final Script
Welcome back, [Hero].
I know, you're going away
again soon. |
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While this young boy bemoans his current situation.
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April Script
I'm not allowed to go
out as it is dangerous. |
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Final Script
I'm not allowed to go out
'cause it's so dangerous. |
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One sailor in town foreshadows an upcoming story point.
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April Script
I've been watching
the northern sky.
I saw something big
falling down to the
north. |
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Final Script
I've been watching the
northern sky.
I saw something big fall
from the sky to the north. |
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The town's expanding trade is good news for the local shopkeeps.
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April Script
We've various kinds of
weapons thanks to the
trading. |
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Final Script
We have various kinds of
weapons, thanks to the
trading. |
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If Bowie tries to get dynamite before going to the castle, he's not getting it.
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April Script
Sir Astral forbids
me to use the explosive.
I need his permission
to give it to you. |
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Final Script
Sir Astral forbids me to use
the dynamite.
I need his permission to give
it to you. |
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New Granseal Castle#
Breaking: Guard promises to keep guarding.
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April Script
We'll guard Granseal
while [Hero] is away! |
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Final Script
We'll guard Granseal while
you're away! |
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As Bowie and the rest have gained fighting experience, the soldiers have been practicing at home.
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April Script
See? These guys have
been getting tougher
these days. |
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Final Script
See? Our guards are getting
tougher day by day. |
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The soldier assigned to the castle's small library has a valid question.
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April Script
How long should I keep
standing here? |
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Final Script
How long should I keep
guard here? |
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(Source: Original TCRF research)
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