This is a sub-page of Proto:Shining Force II.
Story#
Dojo#
Oh yeah, there's a dojo on the west coast. Behind that dojo is a waterfall. Under that waterfall is a naked nude woman with no clothes on. She notices the force.
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April Script
Don't you know this is a
sacred place?! |
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Final Script
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April Script
She's too beautiful for
you. Back, back! |
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Final Script
She's too beautiful for you!
Back, back! |
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Astral slowly pushes Bowie and Peter away, but stops when the woman recognizes him, confusing the codger
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April Script
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Final Script
Oh...you don't remember me? |
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April Script
I'm [Sheela], I was your
pupil at Galam. I was
preparing to become a priest. |
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Final Script
I'm [Sheela]. I was a pupil
of yours in Galam. I was
preparing to become a priest. |
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April Script
[Sheela]! I can't believe
it! You were never so
charming! |
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Final Script
[Sheela]! I can't believe it! |
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Translation Notes
This should be the last set of Astral's lascivious comments that needed to be toned down. |
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April Script
I know you have a scar on
your chest.
You sneaked up on my and
tapped my shoulder.... |
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Final Script
How is that scar on your
chest.
Remember? You snuck up
behind me and tapped my
shoulder.... |
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April Script
And [Sheela] kicked me
in the chest...and it left
a scar.
Nobody but [Sheela]
knows about the scar...Oh,
you became so beautiful! |
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Final Script
And you kicked me in the
chest...and it left a scar.
How could I forget.
Nobody but [Sheela]
knew about that scar....
It still aches sometimes. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
The next five lines had to be rewritten due to lewdness and rudeness. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
This rewrite, though? That not OK. |
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April Script
Were you this lewd when
you were young? |
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Final Script
Hey, aren't you going to
introduce us? |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Astral strikes Peter, presumably. The screen shakes, at any rate.
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April Script
Do your bossiness.
By the way, why are you
here? |
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Final Script
All in good time.
By the way, what are you
doing here? |
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April Script
To kill Red Balon.
He killed my fiance. |
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June Script
I came to kill the Red Baron.
He killed my fiance. |
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Final Script
I came to kill Red Baron.
He killed my fiance. |
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April Script
You said you were getting
married in your letters. |
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
A nice little detail that was rewritten for some reason. |
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Sheela asks why Astral came back to Grans.
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
He is destroying the
entire world. He must be
stopped! |
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Final Script
He'll destroy the entire
world. He must be stopped! |
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April Script
Is Red Balon his follower? |
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Final Script
Is Red Baron his follower? |
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...maybe.
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April Script
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Final Script
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A monk outfit appears above the lake.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Sheela jumps out of the lake, does a flip, changes in mid-air and sticks the landing.
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April Script
Sir Astral, please let me
go with you to defeat Zeon. |
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Final Script
Sir Astral, please let me go
with you. |
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April Script
We welcome you, but can
fight? |
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Final Script
We welcome you, but can you
fight? |
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Yes; Sheela's a Master Monk now.
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April Script
You must've had quite a
bit of training! |
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Final Script
We could always use another
well-trained fighter! |
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Sheela joins the force!
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April Script
Many Galam soldiers are
there in the west.
Be careful. |
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Final Script
Many Galam soldiers are in
the west.
We must be careful. |
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Northern Grans#
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April Script
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Final Script
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Pan to Geshp, already standing in the middle of the field.
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April Script
Unbelievable!
You're really have heart? |
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Final Script
Unbelievable!
You really are persistent. |
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April Script
Shut up!
We cannot die 'till we
destroy all of you. |
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Final Script
We'll never stop!
We will not die until we
destroy all of you. |
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Translation Notes
Maybe they could have changed to "shush up." |
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Geshp gives instructions to his troops, then escapes. Didn't see that coming from a mile away.
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April Script
I think Geshp needs time
to prepare his next trap.
After him now! |
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Final Script
Geshp sure is a tricky
devil.
After him, now! |
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Translation Notes
Astral loses a bit of insight in the final script. |
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Roft#
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April Script
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Final Script
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He runs away.
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April Script
No, no! We're not Galam
soldiers! |
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Final Script
No, wait! We're not Galam
soldiers! |
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He comes back.
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April Script
Oh, sorry. You're not
from Galam. |
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Final Script
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April Script
Oh, it's easy. I can see
it your eyes. |
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Final Script
Oh, it's obvious. I can see
it in your eyes. |
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We cut to Pedro's death scene already in progress. Pedro's lying in bed, with Paseran and an unknown woman by his side.
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April Script
You promised me I'd fly
in the sky! |
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Final Script
You promised to fly me in
the sky! |
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April Script
Oh, yeah...with the Nazca
Ship...I promised....
I'd fly home...to see my
family....
To show how wonderful the
ancient people were.... |
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Final Script
I know...with the Nazca
Ship...I promised...
I'd fly home...to see my
family....
To show them how wonderful
the ancients were.... |
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Petro dies. As the group exits the room, Zynk fumes, stomping around angrily. Peter asks Astral what's wrong with him.
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April Script
I have no idea, but he's
so anxious! |
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Final Script
I have no idea, but he's
obviously disturbed! |
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Zynk paces for a bit, then turns to face the force.
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April Script
[Hero], Sir Astral!
I'm angry! |
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Final Script
[Hero], Sir Astral!
I am angry! |
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April Script
I can't forgive the
devils! I...I... |
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Final Script
I cannot forgive the
devils! |
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April Script
I've overridden my
restrictions on fighting. |
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Final Script
I have overridden my
restrictions on fighting. |
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April Script
I'm joining your force as
a soldier! |
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Final Script
I am joining your force as
a soldier! |
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Zynk joins the force!
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April Script
Let's go defeat the devil
army! |
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June Script
Let us go defeat the devil
army! |
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Final Script
Let us go defeat the Devil
Army! |
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Grans Tunnel#
Time to put that dismembered golem arm to good use.
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April Script
[Hero] put the Golem
Arm on Golem. |
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June Script
[Hero] put the Arm of
Golem on Golem. |
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Final Script
[Hero] put the Arm of
Golem on the golem. |
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April Script
That feels good...
My full power is back!
Thanks to you,
I can move again!
How can I express...
Oh, yes! I'll follow you!
I'll protect you! |
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Final Script
That feels good...
My power is back!
Thank you.
I can move again!
How can I express...
Oh, yes! I'll join you!
I'll protect you! |
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Claude protects the force!
Now that the tunnel to Parmecia is open, the force returns to visit Creed, because they just decided they wanted to, okay?! Geeze.
Creed's Mansion#
The mansion's in disrepair, Oddler is missing, and Creed's gone. What happened here?
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April Script
Oddler regained his
memory and suddenly he
went berserk.
He had a fearful face.
But my master seemed to
understand everything.
He fell to the sea to stop
Oddler.
Is Mr. Creed alive? |
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Final Script
Oddler regained his memory
and suddenly went berserk.
He had a fearful face,
but my master seemed to
understand everything.
He fell into the sea to stop
Oddler.
Is Mr. Creed still alive? |
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The other three potential force members have grown back to their normal size, so that's a positive.
Eric...
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April Script
My room was broken into
and I returned...
They rushed out, but I
couldn't catch them... |
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Final Script
I really want to find the
legendary magic sword....
But I can't do that if I'm
stuck here. |
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Translation Notes
Eric went from trying to be helpful to being a sword-obsessed goon. |
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...Randolf...
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April Script
I was surprised to find I've
returned to my original
size! |
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Final Script
I was surprised to find I
had returned to my original
size! |
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...and Tyrin join the force!
Oh, and if for some reason Eric is turned down...
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April Script
No? Then I continue my
search for the legendary
magic sword. |
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June Script
No? Then I'll continue my
search for the legendary
magic sword. |
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Final Script
No? Then I'll continue my
search for the legendary
magic sword alone. |
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That didn't happen though. Now, back to the plot.
Prism Flower Field#
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April Script
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Final Script
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Translation Notes
The June script uses the final line, but is missing the "button prompt" control code. |
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Pan to Geshp standing in his usual spot.
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April Script
expected.
But, don't worry. I just
finished my work.
Now to welcome you.
It's show time! |
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Final Script
Darn you, Granseal swine!
But, don't worry. I just
finished my preparations.
Yes...everything's ready.
It's show time! |
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Translation Notes
There's no button prompt after the first line in the June script. |
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April Script
Sir Astral...why is he
smiling? |
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Final Script
Sir Astral, why is he smiling? |
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April Script
He believes this is the
place were we'll die.... |
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June Script
He believes this is the place
were we will die.... |
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Final Script
He believes this is the place
where we will die.... |
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It isn't. Turns out that stationary flowers aren't the ultimate embodiments of power, even if they shoot lasers.
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April Script
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Final Script
Prism Flowers?
My Prism Flowers! |
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April Script
[Hero], I shall
return with Red Balon!
You'll pay for this! |
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Final Script
[Hero], I shall return
with Red Baron!
You'll pay for this! |
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Galam Field#
And another battle. Zeon and Geshp are pulling out all the stops to keep the force from progressing, as well they should.
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April Script
How are you today,
[Hero], Astral? |
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Final Script
Now you shall pay for killing
my precious Prism Flowers. |
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Translation Notes
More instances of the greater devils' dialogue being rewritten to fit a specific personality. |
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Pan to...the obvious.
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April Script
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Final Script
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Peter asks where the next trap is.
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April Script
Come on, [Peter],
I'm not such a bad guy.
I just want to introduce
you to my friend. |
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Final Script
Would I do that?
I just want to introduce you
to my friend. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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Red Baron, a familiar-looking crimson-clad cloaked centurion, says hello in mumblese.
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April Script
See his red armor?
It's smeared with blood.
He has killed so very many
people. |
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Final Script
See his red armor?
It's smeared with blood.
He has killed so very many
people. |
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April Script
Now, see you later.
I look forward to seeing
you again. |
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Final Script
Now, it's your turn.
This will be your undoing. |
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April Script
Sir Astral, he's crying.... |
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Final Script
Sir Astral, he's...crying! |
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April Script
I think...I've seen his way
of fighting before.
Let's see his face. |
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Final Script
I think I've seen his style
of fighting before.
Let's see his face. |
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Astral removes the mask. Now let's see who the mass-murdering madman REALLY is!
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Final Script
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Lemon's limp body glows with an unholy light, bringing him back to life!
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April Script
Oh, Sir Astral! I...
had a nightmare.... |
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Final Script
Oh, Sir Astral! I had an
awful nightmare. |
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Sadly, it wasn't a dream.
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Final Script
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April Script
You were controlled by a
devil.
And he made you kill every
person you saw.
You recovered your senses
because we defeated the
devils. |
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Final Script
You were being controlled
by a devil.
And he made you kill every
person you saw.
You recovered your senses
when we defeated the devils. |
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April Script
Ah, what should we do?
How should I atone for my
sins. |
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Final Script
What can I do?
How can I atone for my sins? |
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April Script
You're not to blame.
It's not your fault. The
devils are to blame. |
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Final Script
You're not at fault.
It's not your fault.
The devils are to blame. |
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April Script
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Final Script
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April Script
I have to die for them.
It's my atonement. |
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Final Script
I have to die for my sins.
It will be my atonement. |
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Lemon flees to Galam. Peter wonders if Astral's just going to let him die.
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April Script
[Lemon] is an immortal
vampire now. He can't die
so easily. |
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Final Script
[Lemon] is an immortal
vampire now. He can't die
very easily. |
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And on that cheery note, the force returns to Galam.
Area Dialogue#
Dojo#
Only three monks talk in the Dojo, and this is the only one with text differences.
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April Script
We, master monks are
dedicated to mental
research!
We train ourselves to
approach gods. |
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Final Script
Monks are dedicated to
studying the powers of the
mind.
We train very hard. |
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Translation Notes
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Roft#
Hey, the Mithril that the force has been collecting might not be useless after all.
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April Script
Nobody but the Dwarven
Blacksmith can work upon
Mithril. |
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June Script
Nobody but the Dwarven
Blacksmith can work upon
Mithril. |
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Final Script
Nobody but the Dwarven
Blacksmith can work with
Mithril. |
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In France, he's known as Le Balon Rouge.
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April Script
Red Balon is a cruel
killer.
His armor has been
smeared with blood. |
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June Script
Red Baron is a cruel killer.
He has smeared his armor with
with blood of his enemies. |
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Final Script
Red Baron is a cruel killer.
He has smeared his armor with
the blood of his enemies. |
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How did Petro get back, anyway? The answer may surprise you.
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April Script
The devils kidnapped Mr.
Petro and stole Nazca
Ship. |
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Final Script
The devils kidnapped
Mr. Petro and stole the
Nazca Ship. |
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Paseran mourns the death of his mentor.
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April Script
(sob...sob...)
You're gone... |
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Final Script
(Sob...Sob...)
He's gone.... |
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After exiting and reentering the town, both Paseran and the unknown woman's dialogue change.
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April Script
The Nazca Ship was broken?
I hope Petro gets on the
Nazca Ship in heaven. |
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Final Script
The Nazca Ship crashed?
I hope Petro gets on the
Nazca Ship in the great
beyond. |
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Translation Notes
This was definitely rewritten due to religious reasons. We have the trifecta of no-nos here:
- Astral's lewdness.
- Religious references.
- Telling people to shut up.
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April Script
The devils lied then they
killed Petro. |
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Final Script
The devils lied, and then
killed Petro. |
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Standard shop sign changes.
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April Script
Various Weapons
...Shopkeeper |
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Final Script
Various Weapons
-Shopkeeper |
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April Script
Various Tools
...Shopkeeper |
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June Script
Various Tools
-Shopkeeper |
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Final Script
Various Items
-Shopkeeper |
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(Source: Original TCRF research)
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