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Chapter 10

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Story#

Bedoe#

After Volcanon starts employing the silent treatment, Bowie and Peter report back to the king of Bedoe..

April Script

God Volcanon has forsaken
the people of the earth.

Final Script

God Volcanon has forsaken
the people of the Earth.

King Bedoe asks if he's going to kill Zeon as he demanded. Since there isn't much of a plot otherwise, Bowie agrees.

April Script

You're a man of honor!
Then why don't you go
to see Creed?
He's an ex-greater devil.
He may give you so
information.
But, you must to travel
along the river to get
to Creed's mansion.

Final Script

You're a man of honor!
Why don't you go see Creed?
He's an ex-greater devil.
He may give you some
information.
You must travel along the
river to get to Creed's
mansion.

King Bedoe asks Luke to get a raft from the Polcan mayor.

April Script

OK.

Final Script

Yes, sir!

Before leaving Bedoe, Bowie decides to investigate some bushes at the town's entrance; His undue curiosity earns him a skull-smashing from a hatchling who fell from the cliffs above. The irresponsible mother thanks him for breaking the boy's fall.''
This is going to be important eventually, really.
''

Polca#

Soon after entering, Bowie and co. overhear the voice of monsters. They've invaded the town...they're learning! Luke and two of his bird buddies confront a red-suited dwarf-devil and his minotaur cohorts.

April Script

Bedoe soldiers are such
cowards!

Final Script

Bedoe soliders are cowards!

April Script

Shut up!

Final Script

Be quiet!

Translation Notes
You can't tell murderous demons to shut up. That would be rude.

After that witty ripost, both of Luke's partners are killed.

April Script

You're so cruel.

Final Script

My comrades!

April Script

No more funny business,
stop resisting us?
Now, give me that injured
boy!

Final Script

No more funny business, you
can't resist us!
Now, give me that injured
boy!

April Script

Will you really obey him?

Final Script

Don't listen to him!

Pan over to Gerhalt, who's better than the rest of the beastmen because he dons a feathered cap.

April Script

No! I'll fight against
the devils to guard
Oddler!

Final Script

I'll help you fight against
the devils and guard Oddler!

Gerhalt and Luke call to Bowie and Peter. Peter has no idea why Luke is there. Poor Peter, his short-term memory is terrible.

April Script

I came here to see you
and face these devils.

Final Script

I came here to get a raft
for you.

Luke was deceived by the Polcan people, who were manipulated by the devils. Gerhalt apologizes for the town's actions.

April Script

I don't expect Polca's help.
Please let me join you!

Final Script

Polcans will not fight.
Please let me join you!

Gerhalt joins the force! Luke's eager to join too, so he also- oh. He's knocked unconscious.

April Script

Do you still dare to
resist us?!
Come on! Regret it in
another world!

Final Script

You still dare to resist us?!
For that you shall die!

No he won't.

After the battle, Luke comes back to his senses, such as they are.

April Script

Squawk! They knocked me
senseless...

Final Script

Squawk! They knocked me
senseless.

April Script

Where are the devils?
[Hero], did you defeat
them? How brave you are!
Nobody in Bedoe can fight
like that. Thank you
very much, [Hero].

Final Script

Where are the devils?
[Hero], did you defeat
them?
Nobody in Bedoe can fight
like that. Thank you.

April Script

You think so, too?
Volcanon doesn't know how
brave he is!

Final Script

He's a great fighter.
Volcanon doesn't know how
good he is!

April Script

I can't say...
Let's go to see the Mayor
to get a raft!

Final Script

He'll learn.
Let's go see the mayor and
get a raft!

A significant portion of this part of the game is mayor-talking. Here's some more of it: They mayor thinks that Bowie's bunch are there to possess him.

April Script

What does he mean?

Final Script

What's he talking about?

April Script

I don't know....
What a loon!

Final Script

I don't know...
What a loon!

Ha! Bird humor. The mayor carefully examines Luke.

April Script

He's warm! He's alive!

Final Script

You're warm! You're alive!

The mayor reveals that the devils made a deal to leave Polca alone if they gave Oddler up. The mayor sent Luke in his place.

April Script

I'm sorry...please don't
tell King Bedoe!

Final Script

I'm sorry, please don't
tell King Bedoe!

April Script

All right, I won't...
if you prepare a raft
for [Hero].

Final Script

Alright, I won't...
If you prepare a raft for
[Hero].

The mayor abides.

April Script

Is anybody there?

Final Script

Hey, Ripster!

Translation Notes
In the final script, this beastman gets the dignity of a name.

An offscreen beastman hurries to the mayor. He's asked to prepare a raft, even though it's the last one in town.

April Script

Shut up!
You can make it if
necessary, can't you?!

Final Script

I don't care!
You can make another if
necessary, can't you?!

The downtrodden beastman runs from his oppressor.

April Script

Your raft will be waitingfor you
  on the river.

Final Script

A raft will be waiting for
you on the river.

Sensing that the mayor wants to get rid of them, they head off to see their new raft...only to get interrupted by the Mayor again.

April Script

If possible...

Final Script

If it's possible...

He wants to pawn Oddler, the blind boy, off on the party.

April Script

You brute!
You don't want to
take care of him!

Final Script

You lazy human!
You don't want to take care
of him!

Peter presents a choice: Should Bowie take Oddler with them?

If Bowie says yes...

April Script

Are you serious?
[Hero], you're too kind.

June Script

Are you serious?
[Hero], you're so nice.

Final Script

Are you serious?
[Hero], you're too nice.

April Script

Oh, thank you!
Oddler, [Hero]
is a very kind lad.
You can fully trust him!

Final Script

Oh, thank you!
Oddler, [Hero] will
take you.
You can trust him!

If Bowie says no...

April Script

I agree. Our journey is
too hard for him, as he
is blind.

Final Script

I agree. Our journey will
be too difficult on him,
as he is blind.

It doesn't really matter either way, because Oddler is joining regardless. He introduces himself.

April Script

I was nearly dead when
I came here.
Actually, I don't
remember that...

Final Script

I was nearly dead when I
came here.
Actually, I don't remember...

Bowie takes the strange, plot-important boy along for the ride. Luke sounds like he wants to go with the force too.

April Script

Yes, I am. I want to
fight with [Hero].
There might be some
excitement!

Final Script

I am. I want to fight with
[Hero].
This might be exciting!

Alright then. Luke joins the force! For real this time!

April Script

I didn't know you're such
an optimist!

Final Script

I didn't know you were such
an adventurer!

April Script

Adventure!
Wow! Let's go!

Final Script

Alright!
Wow! Let's go!

South River#

A little-known RPG bylaw dictates that every fantasy RPG must have a Minotaur, Kraken, or Wyvern as a boss at some point in the series. Since this is a river, it's Kraken time.

He was delicious.

Area Dialogue#

Bedoe#

The birdmen in the throne room have new dialogue.

April Script

Goddess Mitula lives in
Tristan on the north side
of the mountains.
The people living in
Tristan are kind, but weak.
Are they all right?

Final Script

Goddess Mitula lives on the
north side of Tristan through
the mountains.
The people living in Tristan
are kind, but weak.
I wonder if they are alright?

April Script

We can't calm down God
Volcanon.
Without his protection,
people on the earth
will perish.
Tristan and Bedoe will
forever remain alone.

Final Script

We can't calm down
Volcanon.
Without his protection, the
people that live on the
ground will perish.
Only Tristan and Bedoe
will survive.

Outside the throne room, a birdkid is perched in thought.

April Script

I had a dream last night
I flew!
Look at me. I can fly.

Final Script

I had a dream last night.
I flew!
Watch! I can fly!

The birdchild hovers above the ground for a bit before gravity takes hold. Impressive, but it's not flying.

April Script

Mmmm...strange....

Final Script

Hmmm...strange...

April Script

I missed. Hee, hee.
Stay there.
I can fly!

Final Script

That didn't work. Hee, hee.
Stay there.
I know I can fly!

The hatchling manages to mantain flight long enough to avoid being a white puddle of goo on the ground.

April Script

That was surprising!
See? I flew!

Final Script

See! I told you!
I can fly...sort of.

Polca#

This random beastman has important information on where to go next.

April Script

There's a desert east of
the river.
There's an ancient ruin
in the desert.

Final Script

There's a desert in the south.
Ancient ruins lay in the
desert.

Beastman? More like Beastcoot!!

April Script

I could help you if I
were younger...
Are they really a
Beastmen? I doubt it!

June Script

I could help you if I were
younger.
But now I'm too darn old.a
Drat!

Final Script

I could help you if I were
younger.
But now I'm too darn old.
Drat!

Translation Notes
The "a" in the second line was left over from the April script.

Ripper, contrary to his name, is a polite, thoughtful fellow.

April Script

You saw Volcanon?
Are you serious?
I've never met him,
though I've lived here
for a long time.

Final Script

You saw Volcanon?
Are you serious?
I've never met him, though
I've lived here all my life.

And then there's this dwarf.

April Script

Clank! Clank!
I heard that blacksmiths
in the ancient time made
special weapons from a
legendary metal.

Final Script

Clank! Clank!
I heard that blacksmiths in
ancient times made special
weapons from a rare metal.

(Source: Original TCRF research)