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Chapter 3

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Story#

Yeel#

After their exhausting 10 foot journey, the force arrives in Yeel and meets Kazin, a blonde-haired elf boy. He says that he's a pupil of Hawel's.

April Script

Sir Hawel lives
just in the north
of this village.

Final Script

Sir Hawel lives just outside
of this village.

Kazin decides to tag along with the team, who head north...to encounter another group of monsters. That was fast.

Since this would be a short update otherwise, let's continue to the next part of the story.

Hawel's Home#

Hawel's home.

April Script

Hawel's home.

June Script

This is Hawel's home.

Final Script

This is Hawel's house.

The force enters to find Galam Soldiers in the residence, with Hawel knocked to the ground.

April Script

Oops! You came back!

Final Script

Oops! You came back early!

The Galam Soldiers run out of the house. Kazin rushes over to Hawel.

April Script

Sir...Sir!

Final Script

Sir...you're alive!

Hawel states the soldiers stole his notes on Ground Seal. Bowie approaches Kazin.

April Script

..........

Final Script

(Whisper)....

Apparently those dots told Kazin that Ground Seal has been opened. Kazin relays this information to Hawel, horrifying the dying man.

April Script

Cough, cough...[Kazin],
listen to me carefully.
Grans Island will
be a hell! That
tower is a sacred
seal to confine a
terrible devil.
Two jewels...cough..
were...installed to...

Final Script

(Cough, cough)...[Kazin],
listen to me carefully.
Grans Island is lost!
That tower is the sacred
seal that confines a terrible
devil.
Two jewels...(cough)...
were...installed to..

Translation Notes
More censorship of religious references / the removal of a (very) mild bit of profanity.

Kazin says to stop talking or he'll die, but Hawel says it's too late anyway. He tells Kazin to search for the jewels to seal the tower, then he dies. It's sad. Kazin decides to fulfill Hawel's last requst.

April Script

Bowie, Please!
His will is related
to your country, right?

Final Script

Bowie, Please!
His wish is related to
your mission, right?

Kazin adds two and two together to get "force", and properly joins the party.

Yeel Field#

After leaving what used to be Hawel's house, the group encounters not a random assortment of monsters, but...Galam forces! Captain Lemon (yes, that's his real name), clad in red armor, greets the group. Kazin asks why they killed Sir Hawel.

April Script

Hmmm....

Final Script

Ummm....

''Lemon doesn't answer. Instead, he tells his soldiers to take the force back alive.'

Making quick work of the Galam troops (Bowie and co. didn't extend the same "take them alive" courtesy), the party approach Lemon. Lemon congratulates them by knocking Bowie unconscious and taking the entire to Galam Prison.

Welp.

Area Dialogue#

Yeel#

More foul-mouthed chickens.

April Script

Cock cooo cock
co cock co co...

Final Script

Bok-bok-bok...
...(scratch)...

April Script

co cock co co...

Final Script

Cock-a-doodle-dooo....

An old man and middle-aged woman discuss peaceful town life in Yeel's tavern.

April Script

There is no soldier, no
noise, and no rule here.
I don't understand
those who want to
leave here.

Final Script

There are no soldiers, no
rules, and no noise here.
I don't understand those who
want to leave this town.

April Script

Young people
nowadays don't know
the value of the peace.
Quiet life is
much better thanthe war.
 

Final Script

Young people nowadays
don't know the value of peace.
War is not fun, but they
think it is.

Translation Notes
The April script contains an extra, erroneous line break.

One woman mentions how many people are interested in Hawel.

April Script

Hawel, Hawel, Hawel!
Why is he so famous?
Just a bigoted guy.

Final Script

Hawel, Hawel, Hawel!
Why is he so important?
He's just an old man.

An old man asks if Bowie came from Granseal.

April Script

My son is working in
Granseal.
What is he doing now?

Final Script

My son is working in
Granseal.
Do you know him?

After Kazin decides to tag along with the party, the girl next to him changes her dialogue.

April Script

Hawel is eccentric.
He seldom came to
this village.
But a boy who's always
with him is so cute.
Is he a grandson?

Final Script

Hawel is eccentric.
He seldom comes to this
village.
Shh...keep this a secret.
I like the boy who is always
with him.

Hawel's Home#

Hawel has his own well! Lucky guy. Well, he used to be lucky.

April Script

A deep, but dirty well.

Final Script

A deep, and dirty well.

Also: Books!

April Script

A book...
LIVE ALONE!

Final Script

A book...
LIVING ALONE

April Script

A book...
[CHAZ]'S DIARY

Final Script

A book...
DIARY

Translation Notes
Oneia / Chaz is a character met much later in the game. Odd that they took this out.

(Source: Original TCRF research)