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Chapter 7

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Story#

New Granseal Castle#

One year has passed since the last update construction of New Granseal. The Minister is addressing the troops, including Bowie and co.

April Script

(cough)...The Kingdom
is reviving, as you can see.
But, we would be better off
if there was no accident.
You're too young to spend
your time to guarding
the country.
Although, you are the
soldiers of Granseal!
Do your best to improve
the Kingdom!

Final Script

(Cough)...our town is being
rebuilt, as you can see.
But, we will be better off
if there are no accidents.
You're too young to spend
your time guarding our new
home.
You are the soldiers of
Granseal!
Do your best to improve our
new home!

This flabbergasts the Minister.

April Script

Sir Astral, please give
them a speech for the
king.

Final Script

Sir Astral, please speak in
place of our King.

April Script

Ah, I got it.

Final Script

Ummmm...OK, I got it.

Astral reiterates the whole "one year has passed" thing, since no one in the room has visually aged at all.

April Script

The castle, the town...
everything is improving.

Final Script

The castle, the town...
everything is coming along
nicely.

...but there's one thing the town is missing: Trade.

April Script

We need to make alliances
with other countries.

Final Script

We need to make alliances
with other towns.

And that's all for today. The Minister lets everyone go.

New Granseal#

Near the castle gate, a soldier and a sailor are discussing a strange bird that's come to town.

April Script

People are surrounding
the bird. Should we
speak to it?
It must be a good
opportunity to know
the continent races.
I go to see the bird!
Tell the King about it!

Final Script

People are surrounding the
bird. Should we talk to it?
It would be a good
opportunity.
I'll go see the bird!
You tell the King about it!

The soldier runs back to the castle, making the sailor spot Bowie.

April Script

Good timing.
They are very excited
to have a strange
guest today!
Why don't you go
to see it?

Final Script

Good timing.
There's a strange animal in
town.
It's very exciting!

At the town entrance, a large crowd surrounds a fat yellow bird. Three children encircle the bird.

April Script

Oooo...it's big!
I'll hit him with this
stick.

Final Script

Oooo...it's big!
I want to touch him!

Translation Notes
The children are a lot meaner in the April script, making the bird's reaction more justified.

The bird quickly dodges. A second boy tries, but he does no better.

April Script

Wow, missed again!

Final Script

Wow, he's fast!

April Script

OK, I can do it!

Final Script

OK, my turn!

The third boy tries. Still no luck on the bird-touching front.

April Script

Oh, he's quick!

Final Script

Gosh, he's quick!

The bird yells at the boys to stop. The boys are understandably shocked that the bird talks.

April Script

Of course, I do.
Is this how greet
strangers?

Final Script

Of course I do.
Is this how you greet
strangers?

The boys tell him to shut up. As we're going to learn throughout the game, this is an impossible request.

April Script

Human are so barbaric.
I didn't know humans
were so impolite.

Final Script

How barbaric!
I didn't know humans were
so impolite.

April Script

The boy is about to
hit the bird.

Final Script

Those boys are about to
hit the bird.

The Minister races to the bird's rescue, ordering the boys to stop.

April Script

What do you think your
doing?

Final Script

What do you think you're
doing?

The Minister approaches Peter and says that they're new here. Peter understands, and the Minister asks Peter to see King Granseal.

New Granseal Castle#

The rest of the party members are already before the King.

April Script

[Hero], it must
be an important job.

Final Script

[Hero], something
important is happening.

Translation Notes
This line of dialogue is shared by Chester, Jaha, and Kazin.

In the castle, Astral asks Peter if he's a legendary phoenix. Peter confirms.

April Script

But...are we so
highborn? I didn't
know that.

Final Script

But...legendary?
I don't know about that.

April Script

You're really highborn,
[Peter]! I read that
phoenix serves a god.

Final Script

You are legendary, [Peter]!
I read that a phoenix serves
a god.

April Script

God, ah, Volcanon!
[Luke] calls him a god.
As long as he's here,
nothing can break the
peace of Parmecia.

Final Script

God? Ah, Volcanon!
[Luke] calls him a god.
As long as he watches over
us, nothing can break the
peace of Parmecia.

April Script

Volcanon! A great
father who created theearth!

June Script

Volcanon! The great being
who created the Earth!

Final Script

Volcanon? The great being
who created the Earth?

Translation Notes
The "great father" could be a religious reference that was later censored, or just wonky translation.

This is the happiest day of Astral's life. He wants to go with Peter to see Volcanon.

April Script

Ah, that's good!
To tell the truth, I
hurt my wing during
this trip.

Final Script

Ummm...OK.
To tell the truth, I hurt
my wing during this trip.

Peter wanted to ask for help, but he doesn't want to trouble anyone.

April Script

Don't worry. Troubles
are good study for
these lads!

Final Script

Don't worry. These lads
love trouble.

Translation Notes
More humorous dialogue courtesy of whoever punched up the English script.

Astral realizes that Bowie's been listening to all of this. Bowie is a master of stealth.

April Script

We're going to Mt.
Volcano with [Peter].It's to the fa
r east!

Final Script

We're going to Mt. Volcano
with [Peter].
It's in the far east!

The Minister tells Astral that he can't go.

April Script

We're still getting used to
this country. He's still
needed here.

Final Script

We're still learning about
this country. You're needed
here.

The King agrees with the Minister.

April Script

[Hero], please take you
group and go with
[Peter].
Astral, you agree?

Final Script

[Hero], please take your
party and go with
[Peter].
Astral, do you agree?

Astral reluctantly agrees. Peter decides to tag along with Bowie.

April Script

Mt. Volcano is in the
east...very far away.

Final Script

Mt. Volcano is in the east....
It's very far away.

The Minister gives Bowie a gift of 100 gold coins. How generous. The party starts their long journey to the east...

...Oh, and there's a group of monsters in the way. But not for long.

Area Dialogue#

New Granseal Castle#

King Granseal still believes that Princess Elis is alive somewhere.

April Script

I would like to go back
to Granseal find her.

Final Script

I would like to go back to
Grans to find her.

Astral is busying ruminating.

April Script

Time goes by very
quickly....
Those two jewels around
your neck always
remind me that....!
The chain is made of
Mithril. We can't
cut it!

Final Script

Time goes by very quickly....
Those two jewels around
your neck will always
remind me of that...!
The chain is made of
Mithril. It can't be cut!

The Minister questions the new soldiers' competency.

April Script

Is everything okay,
[Hero]?
Can these young men
actually guard Kingdom?
The King is no longer
what he was.

June Script

Is everything okay,
[Hero]?
Can these young men guard
the our new town?
The King is no longer what
he was.

Final Script

Is everything okay,
[Hero]?
Can these young men guard
our new town?
The King is no longer what
he was.

Judging from this homesick guy, he's right to question their ability.

April Script

I can't believe it!
Is this Granseal?

Final Script

I can't believe it!
This isn't Granseal!

A maid is sleepy.

April Script

(yyyyawn)...Oh, excuse
me. It's because of
the Minister.
He and Sir Astral sit up
late every night.

Final Script

(Yaaawn)...Oh, excuse me.
I'm tired because of the
Minister.
He and Sir Astral talk
late every night.

One of the guards acts a walking, talking sign.

April Script

Tactical Base!
Ah, you knew it?

Final Script

Tactical Base!
Ah, you knew that?

And, of course, the books.

April Script

A book...
GRANSEAL KINGS

Final Script

A book...
DARK SOL

Translation Notes
This reference to Shining in the Darkness was added by the localization team.
This isn't the last time this happens.

April Script

A book...
DANCING GIRLS!

Final Script

A book...
HINT BOOK

Translation Notes
Oh, Astral. You dirty old wizardman.

New Granseal (Peter's Arrival)#

The item shop's front door is locked. There's a note attached.

April Script

It reads...
SORRY, WE'RE OFF!

Final Script

It reads...
OUT TO LUNCH

The shopkeeper's daughter is still around. She doesn't seem to like giant yellow birds as much as other kids her age do.

April Script

Papa is out now.
He ran to the gate
to see a bird.

Final Script

Papa is out now.
He ran outside to see
the bird.

The crowd surrounding Peter is full of colorful characters.

April Script

May I help...oh, sorry.
A habit stays with me!

Final Script

May I help...oh, sorry.
Old habits die hard.

April Script

You know, I am
always in my shop.
I didn't know there
is such a big bird
like this!

Final Script

You know, I never leave
my shop.
I didn't know birds like
this existed!

April Script

Bowie! Your
father was also
very curious.
They say, that
only lives in this
continent.

Final Script

Bowie! Your father
was also very curious.
He must be indigenous
to the mainland.

After Peter leaves for the castle, the crowd's abuzz. For the most part.

April Script

The bird is gone.
Now, back to the job!

Final Script

The bird is gone.
Now, back to work!

April Script

See, that bird is
special! He belongs
to god!

Final Script

See, that bird is special!
He belongs to a god!

April Script

He looked at me.
I will be scolded!

Final Script

He looked at me scornfully.
I will be disciplined!

April Script

It's you, [Hero].
I never forget your
kindness to save me!

Final Script

Oh, it's you, [Hero].
I'll never forget you.
Thanks for saving me!

April Script

It's boring!

Final Script

This is boring!

New Granseal (Bowie's Departure)#

Bowie talks to his mother before heading off on his monster-killing journey, like a good son.

April Script

You go again?
Under King's order?
Of course I miss you,
but it's a very good
experience for you.

Final Script

You're leaving again?
Under King's order?
Of course, I'll miss you,
but this'll be a good
experience for you.

The shopkeeper's daughter is embarrassed.

April Script

My father said...
[Hero] is nice boy
for me to marry someday!

Final Script

My father said...you would
be a nice boy for me to
marry someday!

The town's Priest church currently consists of a pulpit and a rug.

April Script

At least I want
to have a roof.

Final Script

I'd at least like to have
a roof.

A soldier at the front gate tells of the village to the east.

April Script

There is a village
to the east of here.
But everybody jumps
into the house when
I talk to them...

Final Script

There is a village to the
east of here.
But everybody jumps into a
house when I try to talk
to them....

A sailor is busy building a house on the southeast side.

April Script

This house will be
completed by the time
[Hero] comes back.

Final Script

This house will be completed
by the time you return.

Unfinished buildings make great hiding spots!

April Script

Not yet!
It's a secret
that I'm here!

Final Script

Shhh...
I'm hiding here.
It's a secret!

An enterprising dwarf has invented something of great potential.

April Script

Listen, my great
invention!
An explosive!
You can blow off
the rocks at the
north cave with it!
...No, you can't.
You'll be blown off
too...

June Script

Listen, I've invented
something!
An explosive!
You can blow up the rocks
blocking the north cave
with it!
Ah...no you can't.
You'll be blown up too!

Final Script

Listen, I've invented
something!
An explosive!
You can blow up the rocks
blocking the North Cave
with it!
Ah...no you can't.
You'll be blown up too!

Translation Notes
The June script doesn't properly capitalize North Cave.

The weapon-smith laments his lack of smithing materials.

April Script

I can't make such
good weapons now.
I want to go back
to Granseal...

Final Script

I can't make any decent
weapons now.
I want to go back to
Grans....

The signs for the Weapon and Item shops are incorrectly swapped in the April script.

April Script

WEAPONS

Final Script

ITEMS

April Script

ITEMS

Final Script

WEAPONS

And then the printing press was invented.

April Script

A book...
GREAT VOYAGE!

Final Script

A book...
GREAT VOYAGE

April Script

A book...
SELL AND BUY!

Final Script

A book...
BUY AND SELL

April Script

A book...
HUNTER'S LIFE

Final Script

A magazine...
HUNTER'S LIFE

Translation Notes
Magazines exist in this universe, evidently.

(Source: Original TCRF research)