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This city has the misfortune of being in the path of a malfunctioning Plate System. Earthquakes abound!

Default#

Exterior#

NPCs

May Script

I wonder what was behind those
earthquakes recently.
Maybe something bad
is going to happen...

Final Script

I wonder what was behind those
earthquakes recently?
Maybe something bad
is going to happen...

May Script

You're asking about The Ladea
Tower?
Yes, I think it lies beyond the
peninsula to the east.

August Script

Have you seen the Ladea Tower?

It lies beyond the peninsula
to the east.

Final Script

Have you seen the Ladea Tower?

It stands on the peninsula
to the east.

Translation Notes
The May line should be "It lies at the end of the peninsula to the east." They used the wrong meaning of "先にある" here - if it lied beyond the peninsula, it would be in the ocean. The final script fixes this, more or less.

May Script

You're going to the peninsula?
There's a village called Termi
there, but...
because of the quicksand we
haven't been able to get there.
I wonder if they're OK?

Final Script

You're going to the peninsula?
There's a village called Termi
there, but...
Because of the quicksand we
haven't been able to get there.
I wonder if they're OK?

Objects

May Script

It says
'Danger: Cracks in the Ground
 No Trespassing'

Final Script

It says: 'Danger: Cracks in the
Ground No Trespassing'

Residences#

NPCs

May Script

My son and his wife used to be
living
next door, but...
They've up and left this town,
just abandoning us.

Final Script

My son and his wife used to
live next door, but...
They've up and left this town,
just abandoning us.

May Script

This is just between you and me,
My son's wife,
she's one deprived person!
Actually I'm quite relieved
that she's gone.

Final Script

This is just between you and me.
My son's wife,
she's one depraved person!
Actually, I'm quite relieved
that she's gone.

Translation Notes
This is just a typo. The only thing she's deprived of is her step-mother's love.

May Script

Hey, you.
Did you see the house next door?
I'm scared to death every time
an earthquake occurs,
thinking when this house is
going to be like that one!

Final Script

Hey, did you see the house next
door?
I'm scared to death every time
an earthquake occurs,
thinking when this house is
going to be like that one!

Objects

May Script

They should keep it a little
cleaner than this...

Final Script

What a mess!

May Script

'Child-Rearing Diary'...

Final Script

'Child-Rearing Made Easy.'

Translation Notes
Thing went from a journal to an instructional book.

May Script

Wow, incredible!
These are
all child-rearing
books.

Final Script

Wow, look at all these
child-rearing books.

Tool Shop#

May Script

My husband is making cracks
in the wares so they would break
easily!
I am so ashamed, I just can't
face my neighbors!

Final Script

I can't believe my husband is
taking advantage of our friends!




Translation Notes
Well that's peculiar. Her husband's wares aren't actually any different from normal tool shops, so that could be why this was changed. Makes him less sketchy than he should be, though.

Inn#

NPCs

May Script

With all these earthquakes,
we won't get any customers.
Boo hoo...

Final Script

With all these earthquakes,
we won't get any customers.
sigh.

Translation Notes
The inn owner is in slightly better spirits in the final English draft.

May & August Scripts

With all these sand worms...
The parents will not their
children play outside...
I guess they're just being safe.

Final Script

With all these sand worms...
The parents will not their
children play outside...
I guess they're just being
careful.

Objects

May & August Scripts

These must be so-called
supplies.

Final Script

These must be supplies.

Translation Notes
Standard supplies change.

After the Plate System shutdown#

Exterior#

May Script

When the earthquakes subside,
I'll never again buy anything
from this store!

Final Script

Now that the earthquakes have
subsided
, I'll never again buy
anything from this store!

Translation Notes
The earthquakes are over, so this man now speaks in the past tense.

May Script

I wasn't able to get
any peace of mind
what with the earthquakes,
but how quiet it is now!
It's so quiet,
it's almost eerie.

Final Script

I wasn't able to get any peace
of mind with all the
earthquakes, but how quiet it
is now!
It's so quiet,
it's almost eerie.

Tool Shop#

May Script

When the earthquakes stopped,
suddenly nobody came to shop
here anymore.

Final Script

Now that the earthquakes have
stopped, no one shops here
anymore.

May Script

This must be divine punishment!
You're really dumb...

Final Script

This must be divine punishment!

Translation Notes
Too harsh?

After completing the Fissure of Fear quest#

Residences#

May Script

Thank you for you help.
Since that incident, I'm always
keeping
my child close at hand.

Final Script

Thank you for your help.
Since that incident, I always
keep
my child close at hand.

It's debatable if that's a good
solution.