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Default#

Exterior#

NPCs

May & August Scripts

What a pig this dog is!
Give it food and
it'll eat and eat
!

Final Script

What a pig this dog is!
It never stops eating!


Bow wow!

May & August Scripts

Gee, what a dirty little mutt!

Final Script

Gee, what a fat little mutt!

Translation Notes
They really wanted to emphasize that this is a fat dog, since he's important for a sidequest later on in the game.


May Script

I'm also confident our child
will be safe with Saya.

Final Script

I'm confident our child
will be safe with Saya.

May Script

See that little island
in the big lake near here?
The building on that island
has been called
Soldiers' Temple since long ago.
Once, I swam over there, but
there were monsters all over
the island!
It was frightening and I came
rushing home.
See, here's where I hurt myself.

Final Script

See that little island
in the big lake near here?
The building on that island
has been called
Soldiers' Temple since long ago.
Once, I swam over there, but
there were monsters all over
the island!
It was frightening and I came
rushing home.

Translation Notes
Not sure what part of his person he's showing off here, but the later drafts deleted that line anyway.

May Script

That lake there? It was created
by water filling a hole created
by a large meteorite crashing
into the earth a long time ago.
Unbelievable, huh?

August Script

See the lake there ? It was
created by water filling a hole
created by a large meteorite crashing into the earth a long
time ago. Unbelievable, huh?

Final Script

That lake there? It was created
by a meteor that struck the
planet.
The crater filled with water
long ago.
Unbelievable, huh?

Translation Notes
The final draft fixed a long run-on sentence here, but messed up in astronomical terms; Since the object made impact with the ground, "meteorite" is the correct term, not "meteor."

Objects

May Script

This must be a so-called
floodgate.

Final Script

This must be a floodgate.

Translation Notes
Chaz Ashley: Floodgate critic.

Residences#

May Script

Here's some cheap soda all in
in a row
.

Final Script

The cupboard is full of orange
soda.

Translation Notes
This is wine in the Japanese version, not soda. This is another line that pops up in various Motavian towns, and that the later English drafts tried to make unique lines for in each town.

Armor Store#

NPCs

May Script

Hahn! It's good to see you home!
Pa goes on like that, but
really he's very proud of you.

August Script

Hahn! It's good to see you home!
your Pa goes on like that, but
really he's very proud of you.

Final Script

Hahn! It's good to see you home!
Your Pa goes on like that, but
really he's very proud of you.

May Script

I know, I know, Ma... But
my feelings won't change!

Final Script

I know, Ma... But
my feelings won't change!


May Script

The master talks like that
about his son, Hahn, but...
It's thanks to Hahn sending us
the scientific literature that
he has completed that a rural
place like this is able to sell
such splendid weapons.

Final Script

Hahn's Pa talks like that,
but...
It's thanks to Hahn sending us
the scientific literature that
he has completed that a rural
place like this is able to sell
such splendid weapons.

Translation Notes
This woman is apparently apprenticing under Hahn's father, a detail that's missing from later drafts.

Objects

May Script

Hmmm.
I wonder if this is a book about
raw materials for armor?

Final Script

Hmmm.
Appears to be a book about
raw materials for armor.

Tool Store#

May Script

Oh yes. If only our son was as
bright as Hahn next door.

Final Script

Oh yes. If only our son was as
bright as Hahn.

May Script

It can't be helped,
don't you think?
After all
being a child of that mother...

August Script

Once I enter the Academy, my
mother will be proud of me.



Final Script

It can't be helped,
don't you think?
After all
being a child of that mother...

Translation Notes
Now that's certainly strange. This is one of two dialogues that was completely rewritten in the August draft, then reverted back to the original line for the final version.

Saya's House#

NPCs

May Script

I...I want to use the bathroom,
but I'll have to hold it
'til class is over.
I'm sick and tired of being
teased and called silly names!

Final Script

I...I want to use the bathroom,
but I'll have to hold it
'til class is over.
I don't want to miss a thing
Saya is teaching.

Translation Notes
This child talks about being teased twice more throughout the game, so it's odd why that last line was rewritten.

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May Script

I have a feeling that the recent
ruinous environmental disaster
is due to the deliberate
undertakings of one person
...

Final Script

I think the recent environmental
disaster was deliberately
caused by someone
...

What a smart aleck kid...

Translation Notes
Chaz's response makes more sense in the May draft...


May Script

Thank you for taking care of
Hahn, Alys and Chaz.

Final Script

Thank you, again, for taking
care of Hahn.

Objects

May Script

Hmmm 'No Work No Food'...

Final Script

'Spelling Made Easy'...

Translation Notes
The book's contents are completely different...maybe the editor thought this was too harsh of a lesson.

May Script

It's a blackboard.
Wow, it's authentic!

Final Script

Wow, It's an authentic
blackboard.

May Script

It's a children's picture book.
'The Armed Ant and Six-legged
Spider'...

Final Script

Look at this picture book.
'The Eight Armed Ant and the
Six-legged Spider'...

Get it?]]

May Script

It's a children's picture book.
'The Ceramic Soldiers'...

Final Script

Look at this picture book.
'The Ceramic Soldiers'...

Translation Notes
The book descriptions always start out the same way in the May draft. The August prototype adds a second opening that alternates with the original line.

May Script

It's a children's picture book.
'Motavians Are Disqualified'...

Final Script

Look at this picture book.
'A Day with Ecco.'

No Longer Human]] in the English release, or, literally, "Disqualified from Being Human".)

This was replaced by a Sega reference in the final draft, making it a good fit with the Golden Axe and Sonic books in the same room.

May Script

It's a children's picture book.
'Biography of Great Person
Doctor
Lubetz'

Final Script

Look at this picture book.
'Biography of the Great
Professor Lubetz'

Translation Notes
Another discrepancy introduced in the final draft - there's a statue of Doctor Lubetz at Motavia Academy in Piata.


It's not a good idea to open
other people's cabinets...
but...in this case...

Chaz!!!

May & August Scripts

Yes, ma'am.

Final Script

Ah, you're no fun.

Translation Notes
Chaz is a bit bolder in the final script.


May Script

What a gigantic mirror...Hey!
What's a picture of Hahn doing
here?

Final Script

What a gigantic mirror...Hey!
Look, a picture of Hahn!

After using Alshline#

Residences#

May Script

The other day, there was
a tremendous amount of smoke
coming from the west!
I wonder if there was a big
fire somewhere?
It's rather worrisome.

Final Script

The other day, there was
a tremendous amount of smoke
coming from the west!
I wonder if there was a big
fire somewhere?

After rescuing Demi#

Armor Store#

May Script

So Hahn, you've learnt to say
some mighty cheeky things.
It seems like just yesterday
that you were taking your first
baby steps.

Final Script

So Hahn, he has learnt to say
some mighty cheeky things.
It seems like just yesterday
that he was taking his first
baby steps.

Translation Notes
Hahn's not in the party at this point, so the dialogue was rewritten accordingly.

Saya's House#

May Script

Yeah, so he's hurt, but Saya is
one good natured person to stay
by the side of a hunter that her
fiancee hired!

Final Script

Yeah, so she's hurt, but Saya is
one good-natured person to stay
by the side of a hunter that her
fiancee hired!

Translation Notes
Ah, pronoun trouble.