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Intro#

Wait at the title screen long enough to see this.

Early Script

The Mother Brain created
domed farms on the dry
world Mota, so that
crops will grow.

Final Script

The Mother Brain created
domed farms on the dry
world Mota, so that
crops would grow.

Early Script

But the people of the
Algo system perhaps
became soft in the long
yaers of peace...

Final Script

But the people of the
Algo system perhaps
became soft in the long
years of peace...

Prologue#

Early Script

A young girl is battling
a giant demon; I am
close by, but can't move
or speak! All I can do
is watch while the demon
keeps striking at the
girl.

Final Script

A young girl is battling
a giant demon. I am
close by, but can't move
or speak! All I can do
is watch while the demon
keeps striking at the
girl.

Early Script

I awake in my room,
dimly lit by the early
dawn, filled with an
incredible sadness and
fear. I am , an
agent here in Paseo,
the capital of Mota.
I shake my head as if to
scatter the remnants of
the dream. I have no
time to worry like a
child about nightmares
in this modern age,
especially with the
Mother Brain controlling
all aspects of the
environment and
planning
. I open my
window and take a deep
breath of fresh air,
which
seems to wash away
the bad feeling left by
the dream.

Final Script

I awake in my room,
dimly lit by the early
dawn. I am filled with
an incredible sadness
and fear. I am , an
agent here in Paseo, the
capital of Mota.
I shake my head as if to
scatter the remnants of
the dream. I have no
time to worry like a
child about nightmares
in this modern age,
especially with the
Mother Brain planning
and
controlling all
aspects of the
environment. I open my
window and take a deep
breath of fresh air.
It
seems to wash away
the bad feelings left by
my dream.

Paseo#

Rolf heads to Central Tower for a meeting with the Commander.

Early Script

Good morning, .
How are you? Almost two
years have passed since
you started working for
me, the commander of
Mota. What I am going
to ask you to do will
be the toughest job you
have ever done, because
it is so important and
it concerns
the future of
Mota. As you know,
Algo has been broudht
up by Mother Brain.
My work as a commander
has been to promote the
plans of Mother Brain
smoothly. I had be-
leaved
that Mother Brain
never makes mistakes.
But those monsters all
over Mota now are
just too much to take.
We must find out by our-
selves why those mons-
ters
were born, and how
to bring them under our
control.
, your mission is
to go to the Biosystems
lab and get the re-
corder
. If we look into
the data, we will
figure out how the Bio-
systems
lab ended up
making those monters.
I hope, from the bottom
my heart, that you come
back safely with the
recorder. We'll see each
other again!

Final Script

Good morning, .
How are you? Almost two
years have passed since
you started working for
me, the Commander of
Mota. What I am going
to ask you to do will
be the toughest job you
have ever done, but it
is vital to
the future
of Mota. As you know,
Algo has been brought
up by Mother Brain.
My work as a Commander
has been to smoothly
promote the plans of
Mother Brain. I had
believed that Mother
Brain never makes
mistakes. But those
monsters all over Mota
are just too much!
We must find out by our-
selves why those
monsters were born, and
how to bring them under
control.
, your mission is
to go to the Biosystems
lab and get the
recorder. If we look
into the data, we can
figure out how the
Biosystems lab ended up
making those monsters.
, I hope from the
bottom of my heart that
you come back safely
with the recorder. We'll
see each other again!

Home#

Rolf walks home to prepare for his long journey.

Early Script

After going home and
preparing for the trip,
Nei appears and seems
worried.

Final Script

After going home and
preparing for the trip,
Nei seemed worried.

Early Script

"Nei, I have to leave
for awhile..."

Final Script

Nei, I have to leave
for awhile...

Early Script

Nei stared at me for a
moment.I remembered when
we first met, she looked
at me in just the same
way. That was 7 mounths
ago. Because she was the
product of a mixture of
human cells and those of
a Biomonster, she was an
outcast from society.

Final Script

Nei stared at me for a
moment. I remembered
when we first met, she
looked at me in just the
same way. That was seven
months
ago. Because she
was the product of a
mixture of human cells
and those of a Bio-
monster
, she was an
outcast from society.

Early Script

"You were still small
when we first met, but
now you can take care of
yourself. I'm going on
a dangerous journey; too
dangerous for you. I
worry about you like a
little
sister."

Final Script

You were still small
when we first met, but
now you can take care of
yourself. I'm going on
a dangerous journey: too
dangerous for you. I
worry about you like
you were my
sister.

Early Script

"Please, ! Take me
with you! I'll do
anything for you!"
I took my sack and
started to go, but Nei
still blocked the way. I
had no choice; I decided
to let her come with me.

Final Script

Please, ! Take me
with you! I'll do
anything for you!
I took my sack and
started to go, but Nei
still blocked the way. I
had no choice. I decided
to let her come with me.

Nido Tower#

After traveling to Shure and obtaining the ransom letter from the body of one of the rascals, Rolf and company go to rescue Teim.

Early Script

hands over LETTER;
Teim's hands are
shaking. "My father has
become a killer for my
sake? I must stop him!
Take me to him!" But
there are many who hate
Daram; his doughter
would be an easy target.
puts a vail over
Teim to hide her
identity, and take her
to see her father.

Final Script

hands over LETTER;
Teim's hands are
shaking. "My father has
become a killer for my
sake? I must stop him!
Take me to him!" But
there are many who hate
Darum; his daughter
would be an easy target.
puts a veil over
Teim to hide her
identity, and takes her
to see her father.

Translation Notes
The prototype script alternates between Daram and Darum. The final game settles on "Darum".

If you aren't carrying the ransom letter...

Early Script

I'm Teim,daughter of
Darum. My father
promised me he would
come and help me,so I'm
waiting here to meet
him.

Final Script

I'm Teim,daughter of
Daram. My father
promised me he would
come and help me,so I'm
waiting here to meet
him.

North Bridge#

Rolf and the others accompany Teim, who travels to North Bridge to confront her father.

Early Script

Hey, girl! give me your
money or I'll kill you!
up a treat!

Final Script

Hey girl! Give me your
money or I'll kill you!

Early Script

Why, you...!

Final Script

Why, you...!!!!

Darum unknowingly murders his own daughter.

Early Script

Unnhh!

Final Script

Uhhhh!

Early Script

Teim!! Oh, what have I
done? you won't die
alone!

Final Script

Teim!! Oh, what have I
done? You won't die
alone!

Darum explodes, taking Teim's body with him.

Early Script

This is just one of the
many tragedies which
have come to pass as the
world falls into
turmoil. Somebody must
save us!

Final Script

This is just one of the
many tragedies which
have come to pass as the
world falls into
turmoil. Someone must
save us!

Paseo#

After collecting the data recorder from the Biosystems Lab, Rolf and the others head back to Central Tower.

Early Script

Splended work, !
I will immediately
compare the recorder
with the library data.
I have always believed
that Mother Brain is
absolutely right all the
time, and that our life
is protected by Mother
Brain. But under the
reign of Mother Brain.
we have turned into
wimpy and lazy beings.
Under the circumstances,
we cannot help realizing
that fact. The data must
be ready. You'd better
get going to the
library.

Final Script

Splendid work, !
I will immediately
compare the recorder
with the library data.
I have always believed
that Mother Brain is
absolutely right all the
time, and that our life
is protected by Mother
Brain. But under the
reign of Mother Brain.
we have turned into
weak and lethargic
beings. Under the
circumstances, we cannot
help realizing that
fact. The data must be
ready. You'd better get
going to the library!

At the library...

Early Script

Analysis on recorder has
been completed. The
cause of the accident
in the Biosystems lab
was an overload of
energy poured into the
systems at once. As a
result, the creature
made a rapid evolution.
This creature does not
fit into the cycle of
nature, thus should not
exist. And because this
kind of creature was
turned went out of order.

Final Script

Analysis on recorder has
been completed. The
cause of the accident
in the Biosystems lab
was an overload of
energy poured into the
system all at once. As a
result, the creature
made a rapid evolution.
This creature does not
fit into the cycle of
nature, thus should not
exist. And because this
kind of creature was
created, the natural
cycles
went out of
order.

Early Script

PhantasyStarIIGraph1JP.png
Please look at this
graph. It shows the
amount of energy con-
sumed
in the last couple
of years. Let's overlap
the graphs of tempera-
ture
and rainfall on it.

Final Script

PhantasyStarIIGraph1INT.png
Please look at this
graph. It shows the
amount of energy
consumed in the last
couple of years. Let's
overlap the graphs of
temperature and
rainfall on it.

Early Script

PhantasyStarIIGraph2JP.png
As you see, the energy
which was to be used by
Climatrol to control
temperature and rainfall
seems to have flawed
into the Biosystems lab.
Biohazard could be
something that was
schemed up by someone.
please find out why the
energy leaked from the
Climatrol. Also, if you
are going south, take
this with you. The
bridge over the west
river can be passed with
this. Good luck.

Final Script

PhantasyStarIIGraph2INT.png
As you see, the energy
which was to be used by
Climatrol to control
temperature and rainfall
seems to have flowed
into the Biosystems lab.
Biohazard could be
something that was
schemed up by someone.
Please find out why the
energy leaked from
Climatrol. Also, if you
are going south, take
this with you. The
bridge over the west
river can be passed with
this. Good luck!

Mota Field#

After talking to everyone in the garbage dump of Roron, Rolf and friends find a jet scooter on the coast.

Early Script

Hum...I wonder where
those Mota people went.
Ah-ha! There's a note
attached! "We love
going through garbage
itself. So, we don't
need this. Anyone can
have it." Hey, how
licky I am!

Final Script

Hmm...,I wonder where
those Mota people went.
Ah-ha! There's a note
attached! "We love
going through garbage
itself. So, we don't
need this. Anyone can
have it." Hey, how
lucky I am!

Climatrol#

At the end of this long dungeon, the party encounters a Biomonster who looks just like Nei!

Early Script

"I am Neifirst, I was
born 2 years ago. I am
the product of a Bio-
systems experiment with
animals. The people felt
the experiment was a
failure and thus tried
to kill me.
But I escaped,and stole
DNA data from the
Biosystem,I have
created monsters to
wreak my revenge on the
people who so carelessly
and selfishly played
with life. But there is
another Nei within me; a
Nei who is trying to
stop me."

Final Script

"I am Neifirst, I was
born 2 years ago. I am
the product of a Bio-
systems experiment with
animals. The people felt
the experiment was a
failure and thus tried
to kill me.
"But I escaped,and stole
DNA data from the
Biosystem. I have
created monsters to
wreak revenge on the
people who so carelessly
and selfishly played
with life. But there is
another Nei within me; a
Nei who is trying to
stop me."

Translation Notes
That should be "There was another Nei within me".

Early Script

It can't be,...you don't
mean...?

Final Script

It can't be...,you don't
mean...?

Early Script

Yes,that is the one
that you call Nei. The
one you think is a
friend is a monster who
despises all peaple.

Final Script

"Yes, that is the one
that you call Nei. The
one you think is a
friend is a monster who
despises all people!"

Early Script

"No, I don't hate
humans!" called Nei. "I
separated from Neifirst
because it was so
terrible in here! Of
course it is terrible to
be born a monster! But
I couldn't stand by
while you tried to get
revenge by creating
monsters!

Final Script

"No, I don't hate
humans!" said Nei. "I
separated from Neifirst
because it was so
terrible in her! Of
course it is terrible to
be born a monster! But
I couldn't stand by
while you tried to get
revenge by creating
monsters!"

Early Script

Fool! you say such
things but you are
powerless to stop me!
Just try it!

Final Script

"Fool! You say such
things but you are
powerless to stop me!
Just try it!"

If Nei manages to beat Neifirst by herself (somehow)...

Early Script

", there's no hope
for me. If Neifirst is
dead, I must die,too."
And so saying, Nei
silently closed her
eyes.

Final Script

, there's no hope
for me. If Neifirst is
dead, I must die,too.
And in so saying, Nei
silently closed her
eyes.

In the much more likely event that she loses...

Early Script

Nei, hold on!"

Final Script

Nei, hold on!

Early Script

"There's no hope left
for me. Please,
Don't let them ever
repeat the mistake they
made when they made me.
I hope everyone on Algo
can find happiness in
their new life."

Final Script

"There's no hope left
for me. Please,
don't let them ever
repeat the mistake they
made when they made me.
I hope everyone on Algo
can find happiness in
their new life."

Early Script

"Nei! We'll avenge you!"

Final Script

Nei! We will avenge you!

But in the end, it doesn't matter.

Early Script

calls Nei's name
once again. But his
plaintive cry merely
echoes and fades.

Final Script

calls Nei's name
once again. But his
plaintive cry merely
echoes and re-echoes.

Early Script

The weather control
system is shaking
uncontrollably. Now
Neifirst is dead, there
is no one to controlling
It. All of the pent-up
energy is pouring
into the system!

Final Script

The weather control
system is shaking
terrifically. Now
Neifirst is dead, there
is no one controlling
it. All of the pent-up
energy is pouring
into the system!

Climatrol is destroyed, causing Mota to flood.